Poor kid was just trying to do the right thing. You made him sympathetic. I like where you ended it - we don't need to know what happened next. Sometimes good writing is just knowing when to stop.
You got the perfect level. There was no need to explain anything . You had me in the first two paragraphs with "people who make fun of me" and "Richard was nice to me". And I know how hard it is to "show", to make something apparent just through dialog without "telling".
LOL. His career may not make it much further. If Mr. Richard only knew he had bumbling protector... Awesome story, Scott. Haha. Yours keep getting better all the time.
Fiction intruded into reality to cause a case of mistaken identity. I don't know how the kid will ever recover from his mistake. An ironic but sad ending all around. I like the way you told it from the kid's point of view, Scott.
Gives new meaning to the word “boom!”
Ha yes as in “lower the…”!!
I love the narrator's voice here—so clueless, so sure! Had to laugh at your description of a motel!
Thx, tried hard to make him innocent/challenged respectfully.
I definitely felt that, and felt real sympathy for him at the end. A very deftly written story!
Very kind
At least he meant well...
Yup. Honest mistake
Poor kid will be devastated when he figures out who he killed.
Poor kid was just trying to do the right thing. You made him sympathetic. I like where you ended it - we don't need to know what happened next. Sometimes good writing is just knowing when to stop.
Thx very much, Sharron I was very nervous about presenting him indelicately
You got the perfect level. There was no need to explain anything . You had me in the first two paragraphs with "people who make fun of me" and "Richard was nice to me". And I know how hard it is to "show", to make something apparent just through dialog without "telling".
Thx, means a lot.
That's the movies for you ... so real! Poor kid!
Oscar-worthy makeup and hairstyling effects for sure.
I liked that one, Scott. Very imaginative!
Thx Kim. I got the idea from a new movie where DeNiro played two parts
Wow I didn't expect that ending. Reminded me abit of Alec.
Btw I also have a short story that I am sure will amaze you with it's ending. Can I share?
Didn't see that coming! Great twist.
Thanks, Mark, and thx for reading!
LOL. His career may not make it much further. If Mr. Richard only knew he had bumbling protector... Awesome story, Scott. Haha. Yours keep getting better all the time.
Thx Parker!
Fiction intruded into reality to cause a case of mistaken identity. I don't know how the kid will ever recover from his mistake. An ironic but sad ending all around. I like the way you told it from the kid's point of view, Scott.
Thx K.C., very kind, that voice was a new one for me, challenging.
Drop the Mike
Boom goes the dynamite
Hahaha. Woops. This was fun, Scott. Nice work.
Thx, Nick!